Trance I'm in progress of.

I don't want to be discouraging but honestly, it's a bit of a mess.

I think there are some good ideas that can be expanded upon in there-- for example, the synth trill running throughout could be focused on and turn out to be very catchy and the general ambiance of the synths is up my alley-- but the song lacks cohesion and strength. The kicks and snares sound like they're coming through a toilet paper tube and make the song feel limp and too trebly. You might be able to get away with that if you have solid structure... for instance:



But the song doesn't have structure either. It's just aural confusion. If you're going for a jarring, non-conformist style like that, it'd better have some impact. Make those kicks thwomp and those snares clack and those synths flare. It wouldn't hurt to have a melody in there, either. Or a moment to catch your breath.

Just my thoughts.